Evolving poetry

05/04/2020 12:28
by Da Dale

To use Miss T’s brilliant idea and Maz’s beautiful comment on one of the pictures I posted............
How about having a go at an OD poem?
The rules are••••

Just one line of no more than 8 words
Just one line from each contributor
Nothing that may offend

The poem is entitled:
SUNSHINE OF THE DAFFODILS

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M1960 05/04/2020 13:28

Sorry Dale, I wasn't sure if you were being serious or just playing along - I thought what you wrote on 04/04/20 @ 10:21 suggested the latter. 🙂

Bal 05/04/2020 11:28

Thanks Dale for your efforts to stave off our boredom and raise the tone of the site with some poetry about the great outdoors that we are missing.

Dale 05/04/2020 07:53

Ok forget the rules, I’m bored with it now. Off you go and play boys and if you get too naughty I believe Steve will step in and rap your knuckles

M1960 05/04/2020 02:33

(CD is either very brave, or he wasn't joking about his memory! 😂 I also had an a line in mind, albeit a more risky one, but I didn't have the nerve ... 😮. In which anthology are you intending to publish this masterpiece, Dale? 🤔)

Carpe Diem! 05/04/2020 01:00

would you like to come and play?

Dale 04/04/2020 20:11

So...... they looked at me as if to say .......

M1960 04/04/2020 19:23

😮🤔 I'm sure I don't know what you mean ... 😇

Dale 04/04/2020 18:52

M1960 THINK THATS ONLY YOU!!! Please note, I said nothing offensive, please please read the rules

M1960 04/04/2020 15:42

Perhaps you should rename this poem 'OD (Obscene Dating)'? 😮

Dale 04/04/2020 11:21

🙄🙄 that’s rolling eyes 😀 that’s me smiling

Carpe Diem! 04/04/2020 10:23

Oops, sorry D.....
my memory is not what it used to, used to ....

Miss T 04/04/2020 08:54

😮😂😂

M1960 04/04/2020 03:01

(If anyone is struggling for ideas, remember that 'mate' rhymes with 'date' and with 'fornicate'.🙂)

M1960 04/04/2020 00:51

(Never mind, CD - as you can see, I'm in the doghouse too for the same offence! ☹)

Dale 04/04/2020 00:13

Back to the poem....

Dale 04/04/2020 00:12

Carpe we are only allowed one line each, please check the original rules at the top of the thread 🤨🤨

Carpe Diem! 03/04/2020 23:32

your bits are looking in disarray

Bal 03/04/2020 21:58

They looked at me as if to say ...

RuthieA 03/04/2020 19:35

As they nibbled on discarded peelings..

Andy R 03/04/2020 18:36

but both respected each others' feelings...

Carpe Diem! 03/04/2020 18:18

he looked pleased at her encroaching ...

Miss T 03/04/2020 17:55

😂
The swan then saw her mate approaching....

M1960 03/04/2020 16:00

Sorry 🤔

Dale 03/04/2020 15:58

Remember the original rules, only one line each please. Ok, back to the poem .....

M1960 03/04/2020 15:46

but thinking about producing a daughter

Lazlo Woodbine 03/04/2020 15:25

Not looking swan like, like it oughta.

M1960 03/04/2020 14:48

and the swan was looking rather coy

Walking On 03/04/2020 14:39

the sun rose o'er the shimmering water

Dale 03/04/2020 12:34

I approached quietly and with some joy as

Dale 03/04/2020 12:32

Ok Miss T, my morning walk was around and about the River Tees so I have uploaded a series of 5 photos as inspiration for our next poem. Let’s go back to the original rules and start again.
Maybe we could let it run until it exhausts itself. Maybe there will be time for more contributors ( maybe not but let’s watch and wait )

The poem is entitled:
THE SWAN AND HIS MATE

Miss T 03/04/2020 12:12

Dale...please can we have a new poem?🙂

Glyn2 02/04/2020 23:20

Think I’ll join you - need one! Cheers!!!!!!😀

Highpeakman 02/04/2020 22:40

Then went t'pub for several beers!!!!🙂

Bal 02/04/2020 21:54

I stooped to pick some mermaids tears

M1960 02/04/2020 21:37

Damned seaweed tangled round my feet ...

Dale 02/04/2020 21:23

To walk unhindered I do beseech!!

Miss T 02/04/2020 21:16

New poem....6 lines max!

Alone I stood upon the beach....

Highpeakman 02/04/2020 21:06

That she was beautiful in every way !

Bal 02/04/2020 18:42

Until once more he spies

Lazlo Woodbine 02/04/2020 14:43

That brings their love to swift demise.

Glyn2 02/04/2020 14:42

Her golden locks are turning grey

M1960 02/04/2020 14:18

Or is it just his sweaty feet?

Miss T 02/04/2020 13:39

Their perfume fills the air, so sweet...

Highpeakman 02/04/2020 13:06

While he thinks of her meat pies,

Dale 02/04/2020 12:26

The sunshine of the daffodils, in her eyes